No, it's too abrupt. I'm a fan of inter-world reincarnation stories, too.
The ones that are interesting are interesting, and frankly speaking, I like them.
But this is a bit too bad. At least the transition to another world should be a little more dramatic.
Like getting run over by a car, or exploding in a classroom, or dying in an accident...
But now that I think about it, you've been reincarnated after you've died. Hmmm, that sounds really painful, so this is a safer choice as a result.
Well, anyway, this is a different world. In front of you there's an unfamiliar grassland, and if you look closely you can see a demon-like object you've never seen before strolling about in the distance.
What is this kiwi-like thing on earth?
Not the kiwi fruit...but the kiwi bird in New Zealand.
They're walking around all over the place. I just noticed them. It's going really fast.
Ohhhhhhhh!
That beak looks like it could definitely stab someone. I mean, you can!
I didn't want to retire so quickly in another world, so I ran away as fast as I could.