Chapter 39: Edits – Version 1 (Chapters 1 to 35)

After taking some of the advice on board from comments and also fixing some of the major grammatical errors that I had in the earlier chapters, I've heavily edited the entire novel up until this point. I've also made some changes in regard to the plot and personality of the characters. I'm making this 'chapter' so I can explain all of the edits in a concise way so it's not too surprising when there are some differences in the future.

By the way, I'll be writing this book in 'volumes' since that's how all my favourite light novels are written :)

This volume should conclude around chapter 60 or so—at the end of the Cloaks Arc. In case you were wondering, the next arc will likely be the Killer Winter Arc, where everyone has to survive through a harsh winter (like a super difficult winter). I've also been thinking far into the future and I'd like to create some arcs for a few of the top-ranking individuals on the leaderboard like Ollie, Noah and Mackenzie. I'd also like to have a real arc for Chloe (This one will be a good one). Aside from those, I'd like to have an arc maybe with the Elven race, although some of these arcs can be moulded together.

I'm hoping to get an audiobook of this novel and also a pdf/kindle copy once I finish the first volume. (Now that I think about it, I haven't even thought about what the name of this volume will be~)

My Patreon supporters are going to be crucial for this <3

Also, Volume 0 is in development!

 

Anyways, here are the edits.

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Chapter 1:

• William’s personality is a bit more evident from the beginning in the bullying scene.
• More vivid description of the surroundings when he just arrives.
• Small grammatical fixes

 

Chapter 2:

• Small flow and grammatical edits
• Fixed issue with the inventory size

 

Chapter 3:

• Ashley leaves a {Stone Pickaxe} as a gift
• Slightly more commentary by the MC
• MC is a little less trusting
• Grammatical error edits
• Minion naming issues fixed

 

Chapter 4:

• Spelling and grammar changes

 

Chapter 5:

• Specified that the dead body was male
• Rosie was whispering to herself at the end of the chapter
• Grammatical changes

 

Chapter 6:

• Explained some of the reasoning for surviving the nights
• Explained that he can’t craft anything aside from {Instant Temporary Shelters}
• Grammatical and spelling edits

 

Chapter 7:

• Spelling and grammar fixes

 

Chapter 8:

• Spelling and grammar fixes

 

Chapter 9:

• Spelling and grammar fixes

 

Chapter 10:

• Renamed the chapter to 'Cold Cruel Nights' since it's not really winter. (Winter will be in the next arc)
• More foreshadowing for Rosie’s betrayal (I noticed that there was a lack of overt foreshadowing in the beginning which may have caused some of the issues around chapters 18 to 20.)
• Grammatical fixes

 

Chapter 11:

• More development on William’s personality.
• Better explanation of the Global Rankings
• Grammar and spelling edits

 

Chapter 12:

• Added some more emotion to the dialogue
• Spelling and grammar edits

 

Chapter 13:

• A little bit more elaboration on Elrich’s backstory
• Spelling and grammar edits

 

Chapter 14:

• Spelling and grammar edits

 

Chapter 15:

• No changes

 

Chapter 16 (This was a painful one):

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• Some changes to the description of the setting
• Much more foreshadowing and descriptions of the injured girl
• Chloe is a lot less overt
• More monologues from the MC
• Much more justification for leaving the injured girl
• Chloe is a lot less threatening

Honestly, just reread the chapter; there are some pretty big changes.

 

Chapter 17:

• Spelling and grammar changes

 

Chapter 18:

• Removed some of the unreliable narration
• Spelling and grammar changes

 

Chapter 19:

• Slightly changed Rosie’s personality
• Added more in-depth monologues by the MC
• Added this line, “When was it when people began calling me a psychopath...”

 

Chapter 20:

• Spelling and grammar changes
• (I had originally intended to change this chapter a bit more since this was also a relatively controversial one but no matter what I did, the flow seemed to be quite disrupted, so I’ve left it mostly as is. Hopefully, the changes in the earlier chapters make this a little better anyways.)

 

Chapter 21:

• Spelling and grammar edits (Honestly why didn’t I get Grammarly earlier? Double sidenote, I hate it when people say “Oh don’t use Grammarly for novels, it’s used for formal writing”—like shut up, I obviously know, I only use it to correct minor grammatical errors and spelling errors, I don’t use it to change sentence structure and all that so piss off, Grammarly is a good tool.)

 

Chapter 22:

• Minor spelling and grammar fixes
• Added this line “Ah, when did I become someone who tries so hard?”

 

Chapter 23:

• Small grammatic fixes
• Slight alteration in the interaction between Chloe and William

 

Chapter 24:

• No changes

 

Chapter 25:

• Slight interaction changes between Chloe and William
• Small grammatical fixes

 

Chapter 26:

• Slight edits

 

Chapter 27:

• Slight personality alteration for William
• Grammatical and spelling changes

 

Chapter 28:

• Explained that there were more weapons in each category, but he just didn’t look at all of them.
• Small grammatical and spelling edits

 

Chapter 29:

• Slight grammatical edits

 

Chapter 30-32:

• Change in the number of stones gathered by pickaxe so the math adds up a bit more

 

Chapter 33:

• No changes

 

Chapter 34:

• Added some foreshadowing

 

Chapter 35:

• Minor Edits

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Anyways if you've read to the end then good job I guess.

I'm likely going to edit the novel a few more times in the future since I still might have missed some stuff (It's literally like 2 am here and I'm dying of tiredness, I just had some exams in the past few days as well.)

Well, I'll be waiting for you in the next chapter.

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