Alice. EDIT: I will not re-write them anymore, it will just be a slight edit, the 4 chapters will become 2 chapters instead. Nothing will be lost, so don't worry about it. Thank you everyone for your thoughts. EDIT 2: I have done it, slighlty edited them, 2 chapters now instead of 4. RIP 45+ Favorites and almost 3k views. Skip this or use this board as a Q & A. Seeing my doubts have been cleared. Hey it's me again, I would like to apologize for posting it as a chapter but this is something that I have been thinking about for a few days now. So I have to ask. Should I re-write the first 4 chapters? That being, Prologue, chpt. 0.5 , Side story 1 and 2. Reasons for this being, I think the story starts off incredibly generic. I did not care about story structure when I first started, but now we are here. So I am making myself the question, is it really good enough? If I were to rewrite it, the 4 chapters would probably be condensed into a single prologue or a prologue and a side story, a few things will change, some things will stay the same. So that is my question, I am genuinely curious what everyone thinks about the start.
I can't help but think the story is uninteresting until like chpt. 1, which is the reason I am asking everyone that reads this. (The next paragraph is uninteresting and can be seen as filler.) Also I was told I should apply the show don't tell thing, by someone I met quite recently. I got a lot of feedback so hopefully my writing should improve, but I have to say that doing it in first person feels awkward and hard, so I might keep the telling going a bit more. Sorry if it bothers some of you guys, What is show don't tell? Telling tells you what the person is feeling for example, while showing just hints at the person's feelings, through body language or behaviour etc. It's quite hard to explain but it's the most basic explanation I can give (Not limited to emotions, it is just an easy to understand example), anyways thank you everyone for reading. I owe you all an apology if you think it's a chapter, comment everything you like below. I will keep the daily updates going, which next chapter should be posted at exactly the same time as last one.