Chapter 11: First 10 Chapters Afterthoughts

So its the first 10 chapters, done. Honestly I doesn't feel special but I just wanted everyone to know that I decided to treat this as a draft. I severely underestimated the writing process and how to write a novel. Okay Bye~ you can stay if you want to see some things about what I'm talking about. 

First is the title cover. boy is it complicated so I wanted to draw one myself since the ai stuff wasn't turning out so hot. Mind you I don't draw but I want t post what I have so far, but i have been playing with the system for a while now and I still don't understand how it works, so i guess it will be a surprise.

Next is changing the tags. I never understood what it meant that "stories write themselves," but this true, I had literally Zero ideas for developing the plot, characters and worldbuilding, but they all naturally appeared out of thin air. So now i have a solid idea where this story is heading. I am sorry to disappoint you but there will be no sexual content if yo uwere reading for that. honestly I only put that there since I wasn't sure how strict the rules are. Like is it okay that there is a nude women in chapter 2? Looking at how vague the guidelines are, i assumed if I would put the sexual content button on, there has to be actual pornographic scenes. not this vague idea where I didn't even describe her figure.   

As for the actual writing process, I don't want to edit, because I want to save that for one large project. I know I can go back and edit edit and edit some more and just never progress the story. I have a lot of problem with my writing but lets just talk about the most problematic chapters

Chapter 1- I should've have made AIden quiet and run away from Sebastian at that last scene. I was really insecure about writing a city boy reincarnating into a new world so i looked up some 'city' terms. Mind you, I have some experience with cities. I spend around 2 years worth in individual days in the city, so why was I so insecure about city slang? Idk noob mistake really. Probably too nervous.   

Chapter 2- This chapter is just a mess in ever sense of the word. Should I even bother? i just have to rewrite that entire chapter. its awful. i was thinking about showing his greedy side more... whatever maybe I'll tell later. I'm not too shocked, usually when writing the first few chapters are redrafted the most, I'm glad that they turned out so well expect.. this chapter.

Chapter 5 and 8- They both suffer from the same issue of talking head syndrome. its a writing problem when the writer has two floating heads in space, Chapter 8 isn't nearly as bad as chapter 5, but its still bad. The main issue i noticed is when there isn't enough for the PoV to show. Like chapter 5 should have been Betty's chapter instead of Aiden's chapter and Chapter 8 should have been Aiden's chapter instead of the system's chapter. 

I am sure you noticed minor spelling and grammar mistakes and that's because I stopped editing the chapters. it was taking too much time and it was harming my writing also. So I decided to do away with it.

Another issue i have with writing is that I have to many ideas that are attached to the characters. For example, in chapter 5, what did i do with betty's blacksmithing glove, that I mentioned in the first sentence? Nothing, it was meant for her to pull out the brownies with to show how mismatch she was. Chapter 9, Sebastian was suppose to walk around with that black cat-like thing weighing down his shoulders, but I ended up personifying the chair. Chapter 6/7 i forgot to mention that Lilly is wearing intense make up so her black eyeliner is running down her rosey blush, illustrating mountains since they don't flow down in a straight line. 

Another issue I had is my over reliance on the word "never/will/not" For me I just couldn't read my chapters anymore. they were so heavy and inhumane. humans adapt. "will/never/not." are facts that are solid like the earth's core. It jsu tdoesn't match with what I'm writing about. It really made the writing unbearable, so I stopped using them and Chapter 6 and 7 turned out great if you asked me. On the same note, I rely way to much on personification and similes. I got a few books about poetry to help with this and I hope it will get better.

As for why I am writing this afterthought? I feel like this is a healthy way to interact with the reader instead of my insane moments where i was making comments in the first 3 chapter. I heard that each author has their own fingerprint. I don't need to experience it to know, but I didn't think it could be so blatant. I mean the first 3 chapters were my purest forms of insanity.   

next week will have no chapter for personal reason but I think it will be an interesting one.  Also i saw the 5-star rating???? Uhhh thanks for that i guess lol I feel very humbled by that. I don't think this story really deserves that much but if you insisted. Hopefully you will continue to enjoy the ride. 

 

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